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Can't go on like this,
with what spills from your lips.
I just don't understand,
why nothing goes as planned..

Everything that you speak is lies,
Do you think it will ever justify?
and yet you rely on your lie,
and constantly deny,
just to defend your own self..

I'm tired of the bullshit,
the false poison you spit.
It all kills me inside,
I hate what you are,
but I'm along for the ride.

I can't say that I'm happy,
but I can fake it; can't shake it,
But you take it, while throwing your fit.
Is this what you want from me?

I...hate...you,
and that's quite an understatment,
I hate everything you do;
You're so see-through,
Transparent..

And if you look, and view
you'll misconstrue,
nothings true..
Just more reasons..
Why I hate you..
This one... eh. Just a hate poem >_< That's all.
I may even delete this one later, I was just venting and all that good stuff.

*edit: So since I got a lot of positive remarks.. I will actually keep this one posted.
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Riddle636 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Student Writer
This is fantasitc,
Kills me inside...along for the ride...
my favorite part.

Nice
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Even the hatey ones are good. It's strong, I'll give you that. ^_^
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
I tried to make it strong, without the use of extreme language. Lol. ^^;
So I hope I pulled that off.
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think poems like that are way more better. Using profane language just ruins it all because everyone uses it all the time. You pulled it off pretty good. ;P
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's good to know. :D
I know I used some bad language in some of my last poems, but I've been trying to cut back. :)
So thank you. I'm glad you thought it was good, and that makes me feel so much better. ^_^
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cutting back on the language, that's good. :D

It sounds as if you've had doubts about this poem. What's wrong with it?
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I had doubts because it was a hate poem, and 'hate' is a word I sort of don't believe in, however, I was also just venting quickly with this one. So, I was planning to just delete it.. But after a few comments, I was told not to. So I kept it up.
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmmm, well, it's good. You don't need to me to say it again, but you should keep it.
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Emma-Heart Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love it!! your last few poems that youve written seem like youve been following me cause all of three of these newest poems are all like my life right now.
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