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Can't go on like this,
with what spills from your lips.
I just don't understand,
why nothing goes as planned..

Everything that you speak is lies,
Do you think it will ever justify?
and yet you rely on your lie,
and constantly deny,
just to defend your own self..

I'm tired of the bullshit,
the false poison you spit.
It all kills me inside,
I hate what you are,
but I'm along for the ride.

I can't say that I'm happy,
but I can fake it; can't shake it,
But you take it, while throwing your fit.
Is this what you want from me?

I...hate...you,
and that's quite an understatment,
I hate everything you do;
You're so see-through,
Transparent..

And if you look, and view
you'll misconstrue,
nothings true..
Just more reasons..
Why I hate you..
This one... eh. Just a hate poem >_< That's all.
I may even delete this one later, I was just venting and all that good stuff.

*edit: So since I got a lot of positive remarks.. I will actually keep this one posted.
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Riddle636 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Student Writer
This is fantasitc,
Kills me inside...along for the ride...
my favorite part.

Nice
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Even the hatey ones are good. It's strong, I'll give you that. ^_^
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
I tried to make it strong, without the use of extreme language. Lol. ^^;
So I hope I pulled that off.
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think poems like that are way more better. Using profane language just ruins it all because everyone uses it all the time. You pulled it off pretty good. ;P
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's good to know. :D
I know I used some bad language in some of my last poems, but I've been trying to cut back. :)
So thank you. I'm glad you thought it was good, and that makes me feel so much better. ^_^
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cutting back on the language, that's good. :D

It sounds as if you've had doubts about this poem. What's wrong with it?
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I had doubts because it was a hate poem, and 'hate' is a word I sort of don't believe in, however, I was also just venting quickly with this one. So, I was planning to just delete it.. But after a few comments, I was told not to. So I kept it up.
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmmm, well, it's good. You don't need to me to say it again, but you should keep it.
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Emma-Heart Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love it!! your last few poems that youve written seem like youve been following me cause all of three of these newest poems are all like my life right now.
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
I'm glad you can relate to my poems. It makes me feel good about them, because of that. ^_^
And it makes me even happier to know you enjoy the poems!
:hug:
As always thank for your faves!
It's always appreciated. :dance:
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EchoOfTheNight Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
AMAZING! This one has such anger and hate.....true emotions....
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I feel much better then I did when I wrote this. ^^;

And, of course thank you so much for another fave! :D
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EchoOfTheNight Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure Dear...I love reading anything you write...It so ful of wonder and emotions!
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breadth Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well................... keep venting
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, yes. I plan to lol.
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DarkInuyasha7 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Student Artist
We are in sync man.I said something similar to someone just yesterday -.-"
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's just annoying when all someone does is lie.. It severely pisses me off. >_<

Lol. But, I feel better now xD
Thank you so much for another fave by the way! :D
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DarkInuyasha7 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Student Artist
No probs nd I'm glad you feel better :)
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FeroniaAutumn Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't delete it! It's a good poem!
And you've been able to capture what I could not. ^^
So thanks! :) I have several persons like that in my life... -_- Feels good to read that poem.
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! It just kind of.. came out lmao.
It's annoying isn't it? Ugh, I dislike a lot of the human race. >_<

But, I'm okay now! Happy! :D <-- See? Lol.
Thank you again for another fave! ^^;
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FeroniaAutumn Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is. ^^ Sometimes I feel the same why, that's why I study psychology, I can observe them from a far and laugh.

If you ever need a listening ear, just let me know. :)

You're welcome!
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course ^_^
Now I know someone studying psych, so I can figure out what's wrong with me. xD

Yay!
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DelightDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well that what poetry's about, you are suppose to vent your feelings out (:

Anyways, I liked it and i can relate of course. But good job :clap:
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
True enough lol.
And thank you so much!
And another thanks for the fave! It means a lot to me. :D
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DelightDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your Welcome :)
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I really enjoyed this one! Its just so, how do I say it, raw and emotional. :D
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks to you as always!
Your comments always help me to see something good in my writing. ^^;

And again, thank you for the fave!
It's always appreciated, very much. :D
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WinterWolf10 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Aww you're welcome! :hug:
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xBROKEN--HEARTEDx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i like it. (:

DON'T YOU DARE DELETE! LOL.
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol. Well I'm glad you like it ^_^
I promise, I won't delete it.

I feel MUCH better then I did while spilling this out :evillaugh:
... Oh I mean. :happybounce: lmao

Thanks for the fave of course! :D
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IgnitionInStars Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry, be happy. I got the singing bass in my head. (:
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IgnitionInStars Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hating's a waste you know. I know you gotta get it out though.

:tighthug:
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TheMarrowind Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know it is. But, I'm to the point where... Ugh, I can explode, but I really don't want to do that.
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